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Wednesday,Nov 7 2007, 05:47:09 AMDown Under :))

i read ur umm.. yeah that and i stole your thoughts and put it in words. hehehe


the carnival bellowed with mounting glee
soo gay and happy for all to see
the lights turn up in vivid glare
with rides and wonder booths of fare

then in the dead of the night it close
no trace of smile it weakly doze
all merriment gone in fuzzy haze
as reality sunk-in in tedious glaze

creeping cold of icy snakes drew fast
as courage left fair alone to last
groping sadness fill the air
bewildered of the vulnerability it bear

yearning for an egress for this
hoping for someone to be there at least
to enter its gates and see for real
the anguished soul behind the wheel

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11/12/2007 8:21 PMhmm

crescentwolfmoon
s(hrey)t00pi 19, United States
couldnt help it..had to show it to joseph

11/13/2007 10:49 AMRe: hmm

brokentin
desire 24, Philippines
umm.. i hope he didnt puke his guts off... or did he? hahaha :D
its ok.. cant do anything bout it.. u already showed it to him.hahaha

11/11/2007 5:44 AM Re: hi

mukesh1988
mukesh 21, India
U r simply very nice.

11/11/2007 2:48 PMRe: Re: hi

brokentin
desire 24, Philippines
umm.. writing a poem is nice for u?hahah ok.. thanks :P

11/11/2007 2:50 PMHi do u hav that habit. Wow

mukesh1988
mukesh 21, India

11/11/2007 2:53 PMRe: Hi do u hav that habit. Wow

brokentin
desire 24, Philippines
hey there too.haha thanks for this colorful greeting :P

11/11/2007 3:04 PMRe: Re: Hi do u hav that habit. Wow

mukesh1988
mukesh 21, India
Wats ur mail i.d

11/8/2007 3:08 PM*clears throat and shouts*

SupremeMonarch
FoundMyStar 25, Going to leave the, United Kingdom
I like, I like, I like!!!!!!!!!!


I will share with you mine one day! lol

11/8/2007 3:15 PMRe: *clears throat and shouts*

brokentin
desire 24, Philippines
thank u sooo much ... coming from u,u dont know how much that 2 words counts. *hugssss* :))

do share urs.. i look forward to that day. heheh

11/8/2007 3:21 PMRe: Re: *clears throat and shouts*

SupremeMonarch
FoundMyStar 25, Going to leave the, United Kingdom
haha, I will email you something that I wrote for Chloe, I don't wanna post it on my page because it is for her but seeing that I gave you a rather limited critical review of yours it is only fair that you are allowed to do the same! lol

11/8/2007 3:48 PMRe: Re: Re: *clears throat and shouts*

brokentin
desire 24, Philippines
sure thing bro.. haha i enjoy this very much :P
but u are right.. its for her, she do whatever she does with it since u already gave it to her.haha
but am not much of a critic .. pls bare with me.hehe

11/8/2007 3:52 PMRe: Re: Re: Re: *clears throat and shouts*

SupremeMonarch
FoundMyStar 25, Going to leave the, United Kingdom
lol *hugs* I sent it, see what you think!

11/8/2007 5:46 PMRe: Re: Re: Re: Re: *clears throat and shouts*

brokentin
desire 24, Philippines
*hugs back* :))
umm.. its not as u claimed it was.. it was far more better. :P
u are a good one brother, u claim i was good.. well, i think.. u endow me too much credit.. ur work is full of emotion. and the words were nothing ordinary. hmm.. u were too modest! haha

11/8/2007 6:10 PMRe: Re: Re: Re: Re: Re: *clears throat and shouts*

SupremeMonarch
FoundMyStar 25, Going to leave the, United Kingdom
I am British, I am supposed to be modest! lol...Thank you again for the complements!

11/9/2007 5:41 AMRe: Re: Re: Re: Re: Re: Re: *clears throat and shouts*

brokentin
desire 24, Philippines
I am a Filipino, I am supposed to be .. umm .. what am I supposed to be?? hahaha
nway, ur welcome.. keep writing. haha :D

11/9/2007 6:49 AMRe: Re: Re: Re: Re: Re: Re: Re: *clears throat and shouts*

SupremeMonarch
FoundMyStar 25, Going to leave the, United Kingdom
You are supposed to be strong, proud and beautiful! That's what I know so far! lol

11/11/2007 2:49 PMRe: Re: Re: Re: Re: Re: Re: Re: Re: *clears throat and shout

brokentin
desire 24, Philippines
*ahem* i think u just described ur beloved Chloe.hahahah :D :D :D

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11/7/2007 11:07 AMwow

crescentwolfmoon
s(hrey)t00pi 19, United States
...you are just.........WOW

11/7/2007 6:38 PMRe: wow

RobeeAngela
Robee Angela 33, Philippines
yes she is that and you are not the first to say that....but she wont believe u still.....

11/7/2007 7:01 PMRe: Re: wow

brokentin
desire 24, Philippines
*ahem* am here.. no talking behind my back pls. haha
soo like u to go selling me off.. lol .. forget it .. nway, thanks. *mwahugsss* :P

11/7/2007 11:20 AMRe: wow

brokentin
desire 24, Philippines
.. eeek.. i kinda expect ud say "am kidding" haha
err .. u do exaggerate.. but thanks nway .. :P

11/7/2007 7:21 PMRe: Re: wow

crescentwolfmoon
s(hrey)t00pi 19, United States
i didnt say that because..i wasn't kidding and can you spank robee for me ?

11/7/2007 7:36 PMRe: Re: Re: wow

brokentin
desire 24, Philippines
u werent..? i soo cant .. nvm.haha ok.. i believe u..thanks :D
if i spank her for u.. will u take the spank she gives in return?? i dont wanna be spanked u know. hehe

11/7/2007 7:39 PMRe: Re: Re: Re: wow

crescentwolfmoon
s(hrey)t00pi 19, United States
i will be glad to get spanked by....anyone...

11/7/2007 7:56 PMRe: Re: Re: Re: Re: wow

brokentin
desire 24, Philippines
really..? ok i will advise Robee to use some spikes to make it more exciting haha

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