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Tuesday,Nov 13 2007, 11:29:16 AMObscured =S

Ahh.. i know u wont agree with me. But its how i see u anyway..so bear with it!haha


Half the world is veiled in black
The other half in shining light
Shadows lurked in every crack
Sunlight bared its glare in sight


Moonlit shimmer pierced the dark
Where sun has left no earthly claim
Unfolding sceneries in grayish spark
Such splendor i cannot name


A single glimpse was all it took
To convince a fool like me to see
That underneath the shadowed look
Lays a unicorn on its knee


Moon was vanished and sun took place
Coyly beauty left in haste
The moment gone but not erased
To pelt such wonder is a waste

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11/30/2007 7:00 AMLol! hmmm ...

thabombdiggity
Apaula 27, Apia, Samoa
cute poem Desire ;)

11/30/2007 12:13 PMRe: Lol! hmmm ...

brokentin
desire 24, Philippines
awww glad u think so considering u write stuff urself .. Thank u Apaula :))

11/14/2007 5:57 PM"Obscured"...

garymeetshope
gary 39, Mumbai, India
A great creation from a highly creative mind.
Loved every word of it...its high class...high caliber...keep writting.

11/14/2007 6:02 PMRe: "Obscured"...

brokentin
desire 24, Philippines
hahahaha this is really funny.. man.. i feel silly. having to repeat everything. :P
thank u Gary.. u know how much i value ur opinion, and though u tend to give me too much credit.. i like u for it.hahahah *hugs* :))

11/14/2007 6:25 PMRe: Re: "Obscured"...

garymeetshope
gary 39, Mumbai, India
Take care.

11/14/2007 6:30 PMRe: Re: Re: "Obscured"...

brokentin
desire 24, Philippines
thanks. u too Gary :))

11/14/2007 4:35 AMWhy...

sharky13
Nils 42, Tonga
...should anyone hate you for this?
:-/

11/14/2007 10:13 AMRe: Why...

brokentin
desire 24, Philippines
umm.. i dont think so.haha unless the person reading it dont have the bone for imagination. :P OR i am such a twisted writer that though my intention was to compliment someone i ended up insulting them?hahaha :D
btw.. why do u ask? =S is the meaning really opressive?=S

11/14/2007 10:18 AMRe: Re: Why...

sharky13
Nils 42, Tonga
Actually...I dont understand it...but I was never good at that kind of poetry!
I am more a "realist"!
But you dont openly insult anyone...so "hate" is not an option, I guess!

11/14/2007 10:34 AMRe: Re: Re: Why...

brokentin
desire 24, Philippines
haha we jeans people are, King Nils. haha
but i meant to make that one as a compliment and as a gift for the friendship that person has given me. i know i am not much good with poetry, since am a realist myself.. but i do try. and i hope i was able to put my meaning across. =S
ur thoughts are well appreciated, made me stop on my tracks and think. thank u.. u are always outright with ur thoughts, a true blooded jeans guy.hahaha :D

11/14/2007 10:41 AMRe: Re: Re: Re: Why...

sharky13
Nils 42, Tonga
But if you are realist, you dont have to try to sound peotic. Just let it flow from realism...it will be good!
Just an advice from the bottom of my ...jeans...
(How cheesy does that sound?)

11/14/2007 11:21 AMRe: Re: Re: Re: Re: Why...

brokentin
desire 24, Philippines
cheesy as pepper?hahaha its not cheesy .. its reality. :P
well, i must be half breed then, my heart spurts out such stupidity at times.hehe so.. i have to leave my post as the Princess of the Jeans World :((

11/15/2007 5:06 AMRe: Re: Re: Re: Re: Re: Why...

sharky13
Nils 42, Tonga
No way! Once a princess, you are chosen for life and beyond to roam the hearts of Jeanspeople all over the world...and beyond...maybe!

11/15/2007 6:22 PMRe: Re: Re: Re: Re: Re: Re: Why...

brokentin
desire 24, Philippines
haha i am honored to keep the position since the king has spoken. :P
but what will the Jeansworld people think of their princess?betraying them with this sputtering nonsense i made.hahaha

11/16/2007 4:34 AMRe: Re: Re: Re: Re: Re: Re: Re: Why...

sharky13
Nils 42, Tonga
Wait, wait...jeanspeople LOOOOOOOOVE nonsense!

11/16/2007 6:11 PMRe: Re: Re: Re: Re: Re: Re: Re: Re: Why...

brokentin
desire 24, Philippines
hahaha aye we do.. since the king has spoken.hahahahah
and yeah, nonsense are the only things in life that makes sense :P haha

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11/14/2007 2:00 AMhhaa

crescentwolfmoon
s(hrey)t00pi 19, United States
did rr even check this thing out yet?

11/14/2007 2:56 AMRe: hhaa

brokentin
desire 24, Philippines
idk.. haha it is his choice .. err.. i am not pretty enough for him to drag his eyes and check this out i guess.. perhaps ur booty is?hahaha id like to see u try. :P

11/14/2007 11:07 AMRe: Re: hhaa

crescentwolfmoon
s(hrey)t00pi 19, United States
i WILL seduce him with mah bootay...
he is my love for life after all

11/14/2007 11:19 AMRe: Re: Re: hhaa

brokentin
desire 24, Philippines
hahaha do so Shrey, and i will welcome both ur bootay in my page .. u two are my masters after all .. haha :P

11/14/2007 7:32 PMRe: Re: Re: Re: hhaa

crescentwolfmoon
s(hrey)t00pi 19, United States
hahaa...why do you always have to be so sexual towards us...

11/15/2007 6:27 PMRe: Re: Re: Re: Re: hhaa

brokentin
desire 24, Philippines
sir, u are imagining things. i am merely being courteous and u accuse me of such.. but since we are on the topic, am i really?hahahhahahahahha :P

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11/13/2007 11:52 PMCool

Riker15
Shadow Royal Zorpian Verified Zorpian 20, Poetry is an echo, asking a shadow to dance-Carl Sandburg, Tennessee, United States
Nice One

11/14/2007 12:32 AMRe: Cool

brokentin
desire 24, Philippines
u checked it out?haha its rather err.. twisted for me to write that.. the one i made it for dont agree with me.hahaha but i still thank u Cati. hahaha ur pretty sweet. *mwahugs*

11/14/2007 12:33 AMRe: Re: Cool

Riker15
Shadow Royal Zorpian Verified Zorpian 20, Poetry is an echo, asking a shadow to dance-Carl Sandburg, Tennessee, United States
yeah i did. your welcome and not sure about that but thanks.

11/14/2007 12:52 AMRe: Re: Re: Cool

brokentin
desire 24, Philippines
haha u are sweet.. believe it. *hugsss* :))

11/14/2007 12:56 AMRe: Re: Re: Re: Cool

Riker15
Shadow Royal Zorpian Verified Zorpian 20, Poetry is an echo, asking a shadow to dance-Carl Sandburg, Tennessee, United States
sometimes i dont but thanks. *hugss*

11/14/2007 1:03 AMRe: Re: Re: Re: Re: Cool

brokentin
desire 24, Philippines
stuff happens, and human as we are .. we tend to react .. so.. its ok if we are not sweet sometimes. too much sweetness is sour anyway.haha :P

11/14/2007 1:06 AMRe: Re: Re: Re: Re: Re: Cool

Riker15
Shadow Royal Zorpian Verified Zorpian 20, Poetry is an echo, asking a shadow to dance-Carl Sandburg, Tennessee, United States
*cough* thats true

11/14/2007 1:13 AMRe: Re: Re: Re: Re: Re: Re: Cool

brokentin
desire 24, Philippines
haha thats coz i say so.hahaha just kidding *mwah* :P
btw, a bit of honey in lemon juice is good for ur throat..heheheh

11/14/2007 1:19 AMRe: Re: Re: Re: Re: Re: Re: Re: Cool

Riker15
Shadow Royal Zorpian Verified Zorpian 20, Poetry is an echo, asking a shadow to dance-Carl Sandburg, Tennessee, United States
thanks

11/14/2007 1:22 AMRe: Re: Re: Re: Re: Re: Re: Re: Re: Cool

brokentin
desire 24, Philippines
ur most welcome Cati :P

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11/13/2007 12:00 PMvery nice xxx

mjgmjgbroo
michael Royal Zorpian Verified Zorpian 59, United Kingdom

11/13/2007 1:55 PMRe: very nice xxx

brokentin
desire 24, Philippines
awwww.. ur too sweet Michael.hahaha I am not much of a writer, but i do scribble every now and then.hehe but i thank u immensely for it.haha it means a lot.. knowing uv seen greater work .. &.. u still find it nice.. hahaha *hugsss* :P :P :P
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